A seven year old girl named Khyra from Birmingham died after being kept prisoner by her own mother and her partner. The girl died of severe bronchial pneumonia and septicaemia (blood poisoning) as a result of severe malnutrition. According to pictures shown by prosecutor Timothy Ragatt QC, the couple had cupboards filled with plenty of food and a packed fridge. They kept Khyra and five other children prisoner in a locked room and fed them occasionally porridge, dry bread or fruit. The children were also beaten, stabbed or made to overeat if they were caught grabbing food. The prosecutor says: "It's just as much murder... as if they had shot, stabbed, beaten or strangled Khyra to death,".
My reaction
I really cannot believe people are able to do something like this. When I look to my kids and see their smiling faces, all my worries vanish instantly. How can a mother let her kid starve to death? When my kids do not want to eat I get really nervous and worried about their health and it makes me feel very bad. Then, a whole Broadway Show begins due to make my kids have another bite of that wonderful food that gives you magical powers...Really exhausting....
Sometimes I think that people should be tested before they have kids to see if they really are capable to have them and to deal with them. If that could be possible, there would be less children abuses and murders. This is just one of those thoughts you have while you are doing the dishes.
Jessica
http://news.bbc.co.uk/1/hi/england/west_midlands/8084972.stm
Hi Jessica - note that we need a few more blogs from you before the end of the course (12 in total). Otherwise it all looks good. Here are some comments on two randomly chosen blog posts. My corrections/comments are in [brackets]. As you can see it's mainly the level of formality (avoiding informal words such as 'get' and 'kids') and some word choices.
ReplyDeleteA seven year old girl named Khyra from Birmingham died after being kept prisoner by her own mother and her partner. The girl died of severe bronchial pneumonia and septicaemia (blood poisoning) as a result of severe malnutrition. According to pictures shown by prosecutor Timothy Ragatt QC, the couple had cupboards filled with plenty of food and a packed fridge. They kept Khyra and five other children prisoner in a locked room and [occasionally fed them]porridge, dry bread or fruit. The children were also beaten, stabbed or made to overeat if they were caught grabbing food. The prosecutor says: "It's just as much murder... as if they had shot, stabbed, beaten or strangled Khyra to death[]".
My reaction
I really cannot believe people are able to do something like this. When I look [at] my [children] and see their smiling faces, all my worries vanish instantly. How can a mother let her [child] starve to death? When my [children] do not want to eat I [become very] nervous and worried about their health and it makes me feel very bad. Then, a whole Broadway Show begins [] to make my [children] have another bite of that wonderful food that gives you magical powers...Really exhausting....
Sometimes I think that people should be tested before they have [children] to see if they [are really] capable [of having] them and [raising] with them. If that [were] possible, there would be [fewer cases of] [child] abuse[] and murders. This is just one of those thoughts [one has] while [] doing the dishes.
It is horrible what happened to Khyra from Birmingham! I also wrote an article about it and when reading it, it send chills to my bones. Poor girl, she does not deserve this!
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